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Watching you from afar
My soul begins to cry
Wanting who you are
My love has to die

Masking my emotion
What will you do?
Darkening my devotion
Your light shines through

Can't escape our fate
I want to love you
Am I too late?
What can I do?

Watching you from  afar
My heart begins to tare
Wanting who you are
My passion cannot dare
     I'll simply love you from afar.....
poof me
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Grimitar Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2003
I know the exact feeling. I love the idea of "wanting who you are". It seems so incorrect when loked at technically, but what successful poet has ever been entirely technical? The line has a simple, yet elusive and abstract sense to it. It's inspired.
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ahmose Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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cudlpnk Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2003
You wonderfully captured the whole feeling , wonderful... and it flows so well, your very good with rhymes!
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ahmose Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
wow, thank you very much for the compliment :) I just write what i feel and i'm lucky enough for it to come out fairly well. :)
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turel Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2003
Awww :( So sad,but true for everyone,atleast once in their life,so i would say you were perfectly understood. Fine words :nod:
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ahmose Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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Ramuel Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2003
Well, I couldn't have written a more perfect summary of my love life myself, so I guess you could say I relate to this. Besides the fact that this poem relates to me so well personally, it also kicks ass because it is written expertly. I'm forced to add this to my favorites.
-Ramuel
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ahmose Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much, and i think in some way, this poem can relate to everyone in some way. Sadly enough.
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ahmose Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, very creepy, and thank you :) :hug:
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holeinmysoul424 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2003   Writer
:( wow... I relate to this exactly... felt like the words were coming right out of my mind... creepy. yeahhh... anyways... very well written, nice form, great flow.... touching subject... good stuff :hug:
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